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Hi,

I explain you the situation:
I am french, and one of my clients needed an english translated website.
As I don’t speak enough good english, I hire a freelance translator on the web. After a quick reading of the document, I am not sure that the work have been done professionally and I would like the opinion of perfect english speakers. So here is below a sample part of the text I received:

You dreamt about it… and we have done it for you!

Geneva Vclub Administration and its charming hostesses are happy to present you the web site of new relax area.

Looking through our various headings you will discover a rich world of luxury, beauty, sensuality and elegance that we wished to accommodate totally to the exclusive service of your pleasure and well-being.

During all this familiarization you will enter the incomparable Geneva Vclub world, opening the different aspects of our establishment and having at your disposal a really evaluation tool being necessary for organizing your future visit – we can ensure this visit to be held with neither unpleasant surprise nor disappointment so that you could enjoy the magic of being within our walls.

If during your peregrinations there is any grain of uncertainty or any simple question don’t hesitate to contact us and we will take a greatest pleasure in meeting your expectations.

We wish you a pleasant navigation and we will happy to welcome you in Geneva Vclub

How to become Vclub member?

Reserved for our privileged clients the Vclub’s Club propose, after acquisition of a year member card, an exclusive welcome and particularly preferential conditions for those of our friends who wish to make regular visits and to benefit from all our services and facilities to the full extent.

Member card prices:
CHF 1200.- per year.

Advantages of the Member card
•  Priority information upon our new hostesses.
•  Priority information upon our special parties.
•  Priority reservation for our special parties.
•  Reservation of tables and priority access to the bar.
•  Free entrance to the bar (non-members pay entrance fees).
•  Soft drinks free of charge and without limitations.
•  50% discount for beer and for other alcoholic beverages serviced in glasses.
•  50% discount for all alcoholic beverages in bottles.
•  Possible our bar reservations for private parties.

For more information and for ordering a personal Member card, please, contact us or ask us directly in Vclub during the visit.

Please, tell me if the english is correct or if it’s awfull, thanks a lot !

I’m Russian but I can say it’s good but not perfect.

Thanks for reply, Saying “not perfect” does that mean for you it is really not good or is it really awful ?

It is good for me but maybe isn’t as good for natives.

I found your sampled translated text difficult to speed read and frequently had to reread sentences for full comprehension.

Sophisticated word processors usually have some sort of built in readability test such as this one: http://office.microsoft.com/en-us/word/HP101485061033.aspx

If your site is to try and sell a product to native English speakers then I would suggest getting the text checked by professionals.

If you have Microsoft Word then switch languages to English and run the tests and show us the results.

My native language is English.
 
 

If your site is to try and sell a product to native English speakers then I would suggest getting the text checked by professionals.

Yeah, this is exactly the problem, it should have been checked by a professional that I found on Internet (a freelance translator) but the result job is really awfull, that’s what I wanted to know. Thanks for your answer.